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fade away
sparrow

As men we have always looked up at the stars
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in wonder have reached for the skies
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always on tip-toes and never
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quite close enough
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to touch.
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So in the course of time for every wonder
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we have created wonders of our own
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in order to create for every darkness
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illumination - be its brightness real
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or be it merely our well-trained perception
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On silent midnight highways
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when every inch of your body cries only
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for home
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and seemingly endless tracks spotted
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with ruby red reflect
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your eyes and heart and are mirrored
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in your windshield
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as you move
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closer and closer; to the mighty
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sea of golden light - like stars
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(just closer; closer)
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what you've learned to know as warmth
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nearness, what's familiar and known;
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everything
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those stars, having ever rested in our skies - so patiently
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are not
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How painfully easy it is for them to slip
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from our minds
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in latest, darkest hours when we are lost
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in thought and blinded by the city lights
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as golden seas like still
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across the lake
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reflections play
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along the water's surface.
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How painfully easy it is for us
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to let the stars slip
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from our minds and fade away
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from the omnipresent image
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of our sky in the night.
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17 Feb 06

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I do like this. Let's have more.
 — gingerdave

why "as men"?
 — unknown

thanks for the comments!

"men" is in the sense of "humans". I didn't use the word "humans" because it didn't match the rhythm as well.

believe me, writing sth that only refers to men is the LAST thing I would do.

tell me if you think another word would be better than "men" though.
 — sparrow

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