| She sold her freckle. I paid double.
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Brando_O
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To a girl that knows only my name,
for the girl that is never to blame.
| Sweet girl can you whisper | 1 |
while you kiss your darling sister | 2 |
gently in her sleep | 3 |
below the freckle on her cheek, | 4 |
how much I really miss her. | 5 |
Why I miss her, | 6 |
how I always do. | 7 |
Just, like I always have. | 8 |
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Sweet girl could you write it | 9 |
trace or silently recite it | 10 |
with an outline in her hand | 11 |
as if calligraphy in sand: | 12 |
'I am always here for you' | 13 |
because I am, | 14 |
have always been. | 15 |
This and I were always true. | 16 |
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26 Feb 06 |
Rated 6 (8.2) by 1 users.
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Lovely. Simple and pure.
— fallinforyou
This is GREAT I loved the first couple of lines especially! Well written.
— growingup
L10 - L11 - L12
these lines are delicate.
You speak softly yet specific to this girl to pass a message in such a similar way to the girl inwhich youre ultimately writing for. It is with beautiful direction.
very nice.
— unknown
Over rated i would say but it is easy to adore and for me easy to manipulate inorder to relate as if my own words for what may be a similar situation.
Makes me feel like a sap, dont usually like this shyte but ya done good kid.
— Backspace
cute. simple.
— Equivocality
i love you
— TheYoungCrow
Very Ani Difranco. I really like it.
— MissMay
it's very sweet, i really like it.
— livedeeply
Hey!
Each stanza starts v smoothly but for some reason the second half of each one feels more awkward to me, i'm not sure if this is intended or not, maybe im reading it awkwardly rather than it being written awkwardly. I enjoyed it tho, nice idea =)
— Ink_drinker
Lets touch ;)
— unknown
Annoying.
Not the sentimentality of it, rather the rhyme quality gets on my nerves..particularly the first stanza...that -iss sound..argh.
This has heart to it though, which is nice to read.
— DeformedLion
I quite enjoyed this. I can't think of any real criticism other than it doesn't sound contemporary. But that's not really positive or negative.
— stackpop
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