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they took for granted...
netskyIam

No one knew the reason or what
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or the how or the when and why-not.
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Children women men took for granted
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the day would behave like any other
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until a drone
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a low-flight bird
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buzzed over the lazy the young and the old
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mothers suckling babes at their breasts
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assaulted by ear from above Central Park
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to due south where I dashed down subway stairs
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with a running duck controlling a
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computer-guided flying device
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of disproportionate destructive power.
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What it is
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grimmaced Grandmother Klein
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is a terror worse than 7/11
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run out of milk and ice. And eggs
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froze fast in fallopian tubes
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of women half semened by men they laid
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as mimes in the park
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climbed walls of glass
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which shattered just as
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the payload commanded
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the women the men all sucklings dear
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to bow to the extremely great
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knock-down power
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of an extortionate telly poem
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hangared here to remind
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that if lofted aloud
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all who hear it must die.
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27 Feb 06

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"7/11" is the the brand name of a chain of USA convenience shops.
 — netskyIam

wtf!
 — unknown

thanks for that idea.  
revised, made more grandly,
deliberately,  awful--lol!
 — netskyIam

Terrorpoem's flaps readjusted for less level flight
 — netskyIam

retitled, retouched by removing commas
welcoming all ideas for making this as fatal as possible.  rate it?  thanks,

Reid
 — netskyIam

Reid, you have succeeded admirably here, without doubt the worse poem i have ever seen of yours, i could say a possible contender for the worse poem of all time...nah can't be that good
don't divine for help, just wind this airless ship into the nearest flat top

ladies and gentleman, this is the captain  speaking, we are experiencing engine troubles and will soon crash, i suggest you assume the position, if you look out the starboard windows you will see a number of parachutes opening, that be the flight crew
thank you for flying with us.......this is a recording
 — wantsaname

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