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Mac's ashtray
netskyIam

Mac McCreedy smoked briar pipes
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and the occasional mild cigar.
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His foster grandson thought to create
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a new kind of cigar ashtray for Mac.
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In the second grade, on Pottery Day
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the kids each received a lump of clay.
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The boy formed a bowl and notched the edging.
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He formed a clay thimble, set in the bowl's middle,
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to snuff Mac's cigars by twisting or wedging.
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A glossy brown glaze with dragon's blood highlights
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the child's first invention, ceramic, age seven.
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28 Feb 06

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oh man, i like this.

i just don't understand the (many)  ?
 — dannny

I'll remove that "many" parenthetical.  It was meant to indicate the cliche "all thumbs" without cliche.  But it's a distraction.

Hey, thank you!

I'll make some other small changes to the poem too: periods and such.
reid
 — netskyIam

i like this. nice.
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