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Ode To Insomnia
sodapop

In a sleep deprived state
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There is no such thing as color
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Everything is grey
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Or a shade there of
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There is no such thing as
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originality, or normality for that matter
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"Everything is a copy
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of a copy
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of a copy"
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No memory is required for a living insomniac
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There is no thought or focus
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My recollection of anything and everything is as blurred and distorted,
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as images printed on wet toilet paper
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That is where the healing power of amnesia comes in
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The only audible sound is
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The slurred speech
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Of that internal conflict
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Whurring in your mind
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The battle between lethargy
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And the constant undead feeling of
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An un-alert consciousness
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Entranced in a stupor
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The eminently plain corners of your walls become
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More and more entriuging
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Zoning becomes as common as breathing
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[Which you do much less of]
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Turning away would require the will power of putting a gun to your own head
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This is my life as an insomniac
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Countless hours and days and weeks
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Of nothing but nothing
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Boredom
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And the tendency of random thoughts invading your mental
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All traces of light
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Not already established in your peripheral
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Will burn any sign of your cornias
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This is a lonely state
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There is no color
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Just shades of grey
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Which makes the flag of this lonely state
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The darkest shade of grey
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Like a black and white film
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Recording hours and days and weeks
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Of nothing
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1 Mar 06

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yo soy un hombre sincero

de donde crece la palma

you soy un hombre sincero

de donde crece la palma


Jujulio
 — unknown

you are a sincere man of where the palm trees grow?
 — sodapop

I can tell you for sure that you write very well for your age, far better than many in this world who are senior to you.

The young will always be ahead of their elders. Kudos to your poetry skills!

A biscuit for you if thou can guess my identity. Chances of you guessing correctly are ummmm 2:7000, or maybe less.
 — unknown

i'm going to have to say that those chances are far less than you say they are. I have no idea who you are and so to avoid embarrassing myself i will not even make an attempt.

But thank you for the biscuit offer and the kudos.
 — sodapop

It could be 1 to a million. I'll narrow it down to saying that I am female and have seen you when you were only...

Okay you have to guess!
 — unknown

wow, there are still so many people. uhm. i still have no idea. and once again if i guess i'll probably be wrong so i wont.
 — sodapop

Must you always be correct in your guesses? Don't you ever take chances? Risks?

Another hint: I haven't seen you in almost a decade.
 — unknown

yes. i must always be correct in my guesses. you don't know this since you haven't seen me sense i was three, but i am definately a perfectionist. also, i have seen so many people in my day. so many i remember you could be anyone.
well give me another hint, this will probably give you away. where do you live?
 — sodapop

oopz *since i was three
 — sodapop

That my dear, is one hint I can't give you. What I can tell you is that I don't live near you. I actually live very far away. Almost a whole day's travel away.
 — unknown

sakina?
 — sodapop

Aren't you supposed to be certain? You know, not ask a question but give a definite answer.
 — unknown

fine.
sakina.
 — sodapop

Haha... you got me right! :)
 — unknown

so hows it going friend?
oh, do you have a myspace?
 — sodapop

I'm happy- fine. How are you? :)

I do but rather using friendster.
 — unknown

i am good.
what's your e-mail so i can add you?
i don't have a friendster.
 — sodapop

=.=
 — unknown

okay then.....add me on myspace.
here's my e-mail: jessicaalbaownz@aim.com
and my display name: i bite people
and the name i'm under is: kumiko strange
 — sodapop

"Everything is a copy
of a copy
of a copy"

Be careful about taking memorable lines from movies.
You present this as if it's your own idea, but it's from Fight Club...
 — unknown

thanks for reminding me.
i forgot to put quotes.
 — sodapop

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