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remember to breathe

I remember when	1
you kissed me...	2
in the pool hall	3
not to show love,	4
but merely,	5
a distraction	6
but the attraction was	7
imminent and,	8
... I lost my breath	9

I remember	10
with unfaltering reality	11
when we made love	12
for the first time	13
it was straight out of love;	14
something only Pablo Neruda	15
could have written	16
and still,	17
...I lost my breath	18

you think that I don't love you	19
that I could forget	20
this loss of oxygen to the brain	21
how dare you	22
I couldn't lose these memories	23
with more drugs than	24
"the dark being"	25
has created	26
nor	27
with more joy	28
than	29
"he who is above us"	30
could possibly place	31
in my life	32

I remember when	33
you asked to join me	34
in my religious beliefs	35
that is when	36
for the first time	37
I didn't lose my breath	38
that was when	39
for the first time	40
I faltered	41
that was when	42
for the first time	43
I inhaled the essence of you	44
and of all the things	45
we had already done	46
wanting just to hold you	47
and thnk you for releiving my fears.	48

1 Mar 06

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TITLE: On faltering and the recollection of Genesis
— unknown

Breathing Lessons

thatswhat came to mind when i read it

good job..i like this alot...

i LOVE Pablo Neruda..**cheers**

-Kayla
— notetoself

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my name is villa borghese and dont you forget it!
— unknown

Remember To Breath, I know it might seem simple, but its how you feel whe you first fall in love, it seems so secondary, and then when you get introuble, like this person seems to, you must remember to breath. It just seems appropriate. Good writing.
— dmartin

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