| $439.3 billion to cure cartoonophobia
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crepaway
| In a country of wrong flesh | 1 |
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heads siphon | 2 |
repeat therefore I am | 3 |
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alphabets of holy formula | 4 |
with stigmata hallowed eyes | 5 |
gun powdered mustaches | 6 |
nostalgic bravado machine guns | 7 |
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fire for resurrection | 8 |
grow ripe | 9 |
pick raw | 10 |
stitch the womb (the only passport) | 11 |
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let the children wither | 12 |
into future oil | 13 |
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interpret my god you die | 14 |
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welcome to land-escape divine | 15 |
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and may peace | 16 |
be upon you. | 17 |
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2 Mar 06 |
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original writing, I admire the way your words don't rely on someone else's last words.
— unknown
i wish i know what you mean by someone else's last words
— crepaway
finally! somone who understands!
— onklcrispy
nice
— monarch
onk. am just glad you write. thanks.
monarch- Nice nice. thanks.
— crepaway
wow. It's great seeing your new poems. Your imagination is a vastland, and I've missed your shenanigans.
Love, Grace
— borntodance
grace you're the bessstest...
— crepaway
wow. this is wonderfully written. it reminds me of Ani DiFranco's "Self Evident". it's such a beautifully crafted song that talks about some of the same things your poem does, i think.
http://www.danah.org/Ani/SoMuchShouting/SelfEvident.html
maybe you'd like it/her, if you don't already know her.
— woman_power
channeling bukowskis left gonad through a hal empty bottle of ripple
— noodleman
Right, Right gonad!
— crepaway
nice improv.
— Meep
meep you should have been on the cover.
— crepaway
should there be a $ before 439.3 billion?
this is tremendous.
— root
hi root $$$
woman power Ani rules..
— crepaway
Wow! I dig this so much! Awesome! It's the whole way and the words you use to make this whole piece come together. I had to read it a few times and each time I did, it got better and better. It's awesome. YOU'RE awesome! Peace be upon you.
— starr
Starr, thank you for spending the time, the lines are bouncy -am happy that you like it.
— crepaway
i read this like a perverse pledge of insane allegiance is how i sees it
one nation, under shit...
— noodleman
fundOmentalism , bigOtry, and an excuse 4 an arm race
— unknown
perverse pledge of insane allegiance :) I saw pink.floyd the Wall with your words...in my endeavor, words chosen as an exposé to religious zealotry and questioning our (US) reaction.
peace
— crepaway
dislike the way L14 is written
— inutile
hmmm inutile, honestly l14 is my favorite line. it ties this whole piece together, the lack of punctuation demands from the reader to interpret, interpret
what do you dislike about it?
cp
— unknown
too disjointed, perhaps?
not quite sure, other than my distaste for it is strong.
if you like it, that's all that matters.
— inutile
no matter - thanks for the read inutile.
— crepaway
nice, clever ending.
— listen
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