| requiem for the sojourning night
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wendz
| feather memories | 1 |
trapped by sigh and regret | 2 |
pour out when night darkens, | 3 |
pauses in breath; | 4 |
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an hour unbroken | 5 |
by neither wind | 6 |
nor restlessness. | 7 |
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centuries of loneliness | 8 |
crush fragile hope, | 9 |
despairs what once beat | 10 |
in stillness and | 11 |
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you tremble through night, | 12 |
slipstream tears inked | 13 |
indelibly into bare skin, | 14 |
warm touch, and half a sheet | 15 |
of wax drawings. | 16 |
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3 Mar 06 |
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terrible!
awful!
ow horrible
the poem is good
because i say so
thanks
— unknown
Well. It's beautifully impressionistic. On the other hand, it's quite an abstract.
I can't tell what it is about other than a female's sensitve musings. Abstractions
are, I think, over-relied on here. What is a wax drawing? "centuries" of lonliness?
So many metaphors without anchors for the reader to grasp too. I grabbed for wax
but &n bsp; I'm sli p p i ng
ouch! a half inch fall.
I like the poem anyway. Its atmospheric.
— netskyIam
nice work.
— listen
Feather memories - for that alone, this should get an 8 minimum!
— Isabelle5
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