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cultured nonsense
novice

Prattling five foot Cavaluccis’ and Camillos’
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cheek tweaking fingers came on Sunday -
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thick, bent and hard pinching the handles
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of grandma’s hand-painted teacups
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- amputated of their glass cased pedestal
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for 2 o’clock dessert-
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They sipped, and nail tips brushed their cracked lips,
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rose red chipped polish glossed over cuticles like plastic
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that commare smiles and invites you to sit on…
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The droning exchange but affixations and banter
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drooping copiously over silver trays of pizzelles and biscotti –
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eager, meager morsels posed as an apron donned, pushy taste tester’s
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superfluous “stick your nose in and sniff up what she’s cooking” invitation
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to access and assess all our directions and selections
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Punches of stout lady accents and nodding tones
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fused and poured over the cup in my grasp,
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dripped onto the sticky linoleum
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into infectious puddles.
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But still failed to puncture
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my stagnant stare
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and I remained their idle trophy –
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absorbing the heinous stench
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of cultured nonsense.
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14 Aug 03

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commare - a term used in the family to denote "godmother".
 — novice

emazung! I savored every word of this poem, it was like a luscious five course thanksgiving meal that never made me full, only wanting more. That sounds corny doesn't it? Anyway, good job, I reall(X7) enjoyed what you have written...tralfaz-12 intergalactic zest!
 — onklcrispy

Brilliant stuff. For some reason i could hear a Northern English accent as i was reading it. Don't think that was even remotely intended, but there it was anyway. The crammed, full phrasing reminded me a bit of Hubert Selby Jr. (A very good thing). great work novice.
 — nose

There were many good parts in this poem, but try reading it aloud, its like being beaten to death with a wet sock. You need to adopt a lighter touch.
 — susanna15

This is rich and a slightly humorous. While the bitter disgust ("droning", "infectious", "stagnant", "heinous stench") may be colorful, the poem would be better served (IMO) by supplanting it with humor instead. Still, a fun read.
 — boothben

blanket of unpoetical blanket',,.- barked the barker.

ballpoint hooker. backoff! cant you see the makings of a monument.?- -in fact your stepping on the best part of the plaque. .forgive me.

talking to myself with a tone of spoiled kid.with a spoken language in my hand.

-just a folding chair of this invention.
 — misspell

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