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liongirl
sggunal

liongirl
 1
morning sun on knapsack back
 2
furry hood on bed head
 3
watching trudging shadow in snow
 4
and picturing that you are
 5
 
 
 
 
liongirl
 6
not idly waiting but biding
 7
time    body sideways  
 8
a gash  an unshakeable node  through icy winds
 9
leaning on metal posts for trees
 10
 
 
and then not bussing but bounding
 11
blind    body archways
 12
a dash  on dispensable road  down icy paths
 13
grasping on blackened tarps
 14
for soil  the warm rush in the
 15
damp pads of your paws
 16
boasting that you are
 17
 
 
 
 
liongirl
 18
with lectures for jungles
 19
reined queen of academic
 20
ambiguity   more thorough than
 21
a machete
 22
sipping on vending-machine
 23
iced green tea
 24
jaws moving
 25
gum chewing
 26
tongue silent and cinnamon
 27
sweet    ears pricked
 28
listening  lapping up
 29
from pompous professors
 30
as though from ancient rivers    
 31
 
 
in lieu of roars
 32
liongirl's throat gets cleared
 33
and another assignment hacks out
 34
bleeding like red pens
 35
crimson marks on  
 36
clawing hands    searching
 37
in doubts for dens  
 38
keeping in measure of the time
 39
between one cry
 40
               one fury
 41
                one flurry
 42
and the next
 43
 
 
 
 
liongirl
 44
a dissappearing act in teeth
 45
a grinning Cheshire    reaching
 46
and licking like fire   laughing
 47
fluorescent and bright
 48
grotesque, carefree, polite
 49
stomach rumbling queasy
 50
bowed down over sushi lunch
 51
inserted whole in muzzled mouth  
 52
 
 
liongirl kowtows to clocks on campus walls
 53
eyes sharp on curling second hands and
 54
dropping her neck in an easy nod
 55
to a passing friend  
 56
starts the way home early
 57
careful it doesn’t get dark
 58
come time to be alone  so she can be
 59
 
 
liongirl
 60
setting sun on sagging back
 61
the shadow of this hood
 62
wants to be you and
 63
you can tell yourself
 64
that you are
 65
always a step away from your boots  
 66
you can tell yourself
 67
you are  you are
 68

6 Mar 06


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what the hell happened to this site i wanna know?


its all emmo lately

emmo is good

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but up to a point

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emmo my arse

raftermanjaro
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Thanks raftermanjaro for that very err specific critique of this specific poem :)
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oh that was me, forgot to login
 — sggunal

And it's emo not emmo dammit!  (She said a year later, heh)
 — sggunal

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