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the week stretches longer before us - you and me
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the late-night rehersals, coffee breaks (she likes coffee...we don't)
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exams, papers, dinner in midtown, your hand:
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she holds it, I can't, I'm too busy.
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nor am I your girlfriend.
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and while I pretend to sleep across from you
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I can't help but see your eyes on her
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your hug seems half-assed in retrospect
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and I worry that when you call us best friends,
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you're a liar
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8 Mar 06

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Wow, it's sad, but beautiful! you've done a great job on this piece!
 — livedeeply

I like this one, but for some reason, if I wrote it, I'd be dissapointed, so never be too proud of the beautiful pity that you compose on the screen.
 — starwars

dump em

i say dump em

be viscous!
 — unknown

the word choice was not well-thought out...nice idea to the poem...but the words need to be hand-picked with care. work on this. 6/10
 — Henry

i like this! i'm a harsh critique so enjoy this.
 — sugar
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