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i wish.

i wish	1
i could	2
stop all this	3
clamor clang	4
writing on the floor	5
while dancing cracks	6
slap ants and	7
utopia nevermore	8
and shatter slang	9
song that sang	10
a few coughs	11
notes almost	12
lost. spilt malt	13
and asphalt	14
are all i wish	15
i could forget	16
forever but	17
you are all i	18
can banter	19
hero usual hand	20
and beaches something	21
something something	22
just i wish	23
each of those	24
and all of those	25
jesus' would	26
open their	27
hands heads	28
feet.	29

11 Mar 06

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i don't understand the significance of using 'something' three times. it takes away from the poem.
— livedeeply

This flows.
— gingerdave

how come you do it everytime?
you're one of my favourites here midare.
beautiful piece.
— varun

thanks, everyone.
— midare

nice poem!
— dax

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