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Gloria K. Fiero; fiero.
OKcomputer

loved you gloria. smoking cigarettes with you.
 1
with yellowed fingers and every crooked hair on my head
 2
scented therefore and tangled
 3
in circles.
 4
imagine our eyes closed, bodies still,
 5
a guitar riff hanging slightly
 6
above the tip-tops
 7
of our skulls -- your head pinned by your body
 8
against harsh brick, nearer to the door
 9
than mine, fire-mouthed beauty --
 10
and the furnace buzzes
 11
with my brain,
 12
and your lungs stagger
 13
as    you  gradually deflate,chest plunging to hell
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releasing god from your lungs.
 15
collecting the atmosphere as your own.
 16
watching yourself scatter.
 17
 
 
i've had
 18
april showers before, honey, cold ones, so
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i know my shivers well. jerking gasps
 20
with you,
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i might sleep lightly
 22
(my breath has changed in distribution.
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it is slowly born.) and tonight, i will sleep
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without touching you. there are already
 25
yards between us.
 26
the distance pushing.
 27
these are my thoughts as i watch you, foreign now, glorious.
 28
your ankles bent inward,
 29
pidgeon toed, sleeping on your spine,
 30
 
 
sleeping on your back with your left ear to the ground.
 31
your breath visable, quickly ,
 32
then gone. it's april. cold. you're wearing highwaters but
 33
there will not be a flood, i'm thinking. i can see your socks,
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        i can see your pink florid undies,
 35
        pretty girl!
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        pull up your pants.
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you're in my sight now,
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gloria,
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your first name gives you life.
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flushed cheeks, blushing
 41
for your nudity.
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sweetly.
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i could love you again.
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possibly.
 45
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
and as for the K. Fiero:
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i'll jump from a balcony
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before i read any more
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of your writing.
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12 Mar 06

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Thanks FUCKRIOT!!!
 — OKcomputer

For the five, I mean.
 — OKcomputer

I really enjoyed this. It was so different than what I've read here lately. I think your imagry was excellent and I really really really liked your voice. It was a soft storytelling observing voice that seemed to tell all the right details in the right sequence. This is a great piece, well done.
 — madderhatter

Hmm.

Somewhat interesting...

At times it seems like you're really going somewhere with it.

-ramher
 — unknown

a slap of a poem
mademe laugh at times, an other wince(in a good way)

i have to say the spacing irritated me a bit, but fuck it

i never knew who Gloria K. Fiero was until i read this
i am baffled but intruiged, and now i have something to do for the rest of the day

tanx!
 — onklcrispy

standout poem.  Was it a required text, the fiero, I mean? Ah, you needn't answer. Your poem has power. THWACK appeal. gorgeous, passionately outraged and tender writing and wiring.

Grace  ( pigeon, 30 + visible, 32)
 — borntodance

i love this, lots and lots and lots. its sexy and intimate and tender and human and original. i didn't understand the end bit. is it an injoke? or am i missing something. gorgeous
 — berrykid

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 — noodleman

where are you good poems?
 — Meep

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 — Meep

I'm sure once you wrote good poems, where did they go??
 — Meep

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