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please take our picture out of the sunlight [things can't fade]
colormetink

and i'll translate your lips
 1
your blue eyes, our love
 2
into a million similes
 3
and metaphors
 4
 
 
if i can just find
 5
all of the words
 6

an attempt to be light hearted about love at a very... well, a very heavy hearted time

15 Mar 06

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polite ways of letting people know they are not wanted, I could write a book.
 — Meep

I like this, short and sweet.
 — livedeeply

might want to change l5 to "when I can", since you've started it out in future tense with "and I'll..", it would keep the flow smoother.


other than that..... it's slightly cliche, but then that's always hard to escape in a poem about love.


I like it 8)
 — misspanda

wow. wonderful!  
 — FrayedSkirt
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