| To Be A Poet
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dmartin
| We’re a dying breed, | 1 |
sent to leave thoughts on napkins | 2 |
for those who dine at our last venture, | 3 |
those who look at the same surroundings | 4 |
but don’t see the same things. | 5 |
Dabble in ink and lead, | 6 |
painting pictures on papaya | 7 |
with the faintest gesture of hands | 8 |
and the most consideracy we can muster. | 9 |
If you see us, smile, | 10 |
do something we can remember, | 11 |
And continue on… | 12 |
We will. | 13 |
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15 Mar 06 |
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very nice but lacking something - drying breed doesnt realy "catch" me and its a bit small. A tiny poem or a long poem i feel would do this justice - not a kinda middley poem. but i like the bit about napkins!
— philoanon
Perhaps change to "consideration" in line 9. I enjoy the simplicity of this, the idea that we who write continue to do it because it's part of our nature to see and to tell.
— Isabelle5
The funny thing is: i don't think poets are a dying breed. With all the journals, poetry slams and creative writing programs out there it seems poets are exploding everywhere. The real question is poeticness? That seems to be diminishing.
Work at condensing some of the lines and the language. Why smile? That question needs to be addressed.
— boromir4121
starts out a bit weak, then gets stronger, then pitters out into a disappointing, cliched ending.
this has lots of potential... lines 2-9 are the best, before and after are nothing special.
one of the keys to excellent poetry is imagery, and the picture you painted in the middle parts is very good... keep that up throughout, especially in the opening and closing, since that is what a reader most often remembers the best...
basically what i'm saying lol is that 10-13 need work, and 'dying breed' is just too... flat.
¡regresaré!
— misspanda
I like this one very much. It's sad how much the truth hurts, explaining what we(most of us) are.
— starwars
we will. we will indeed.
— unknown
I dont think poets are a dying or drying breed at all and I dont agree in segregating yourself from your source of inspiration. A quote in a different context but i think it can be applied to what i have interpreted from your work. "Those who think themselves masters of others are indeed greater slaves than they." As a writer you are no different to a painter or a dancer or for that matter a politician or plumber, isolation is not they key to understanding.
— SolCarloman
hmm interesting
i like it.
— SweetPain
Papaya?
— unknown
i think you're talking about what Rimbaud called "word-shitters"... the people who borrow a given set of rhythms and cliche' to make a kind of decorative word quilt for fun and profit. they're really not inventing poetry, and that's really the only definition of "poet" which survives careful thinking about poet and poetry.
"we're a dying breed"... why? tell me really. is it AIDS?
— joey
Loved it....I am a napkin queen! =)
— candykid
I want to become a Poet like a sphere
which has his centre everywhere
and her circumference nowhere,
without but within, no beginning nor end...
A writer writes and never stops writing and rewrites and writes again and again ... and sHe never stops writing, except to Dream, perhaps to reach for that Star in that Star crowded Sky and bring that Star to the end of his Pen and write like plasma all over again ...
as you've shown us in this wondrous write
— AlchemiA
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