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The Orchard
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The summer house, as they called it
 1
was, when we found it
 2
something of a disappointment.
 3
 
 
Neither large nor small, no-one lived
 4
in its square, empty rooms. A friend
 5
of the family met us by the wooden gate
 6
 
 
to show us round, to translate. She recalled
 7
playing in the garden - most especially
 8
how my now foolish, fretful eccentric aunt
 9
 
 
had been the most beautiful, dimpled, sunny
 10
smiling child that she had ever seen.
 11
'That is where they put her swing'. I stared
 12
 
 
at an unyielding tangle of trees and bushes,
 13
all unkempt, unable quite to comprehend.
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'They're still here,' she said.
 15
 
 
'Those trees were named for them
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and there was one for me.' I saw
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apple, pear, wild plum, almond, still bearing fruit
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in this late season, wearing their best clothes,
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remembering games of hide and seek,
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treasure hunts and blind man's buff and then
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I realised how wise my grandmother had been
 22
to plant this flowering orchard
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for she had known that I would seek it out
 24
 
 
one day, Tentatively I touched smooth
 25
sunburned bark of an apple bough,
 26
took fruit it proffered. The texture
 27
 
 
felt like the smooth skin of a well - loved hand.
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I stood among the trees, surrounded
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by the spirits of my aunts.
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16 Mar 06

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Beautiful.  The enjambment works well. Carries an energy that's transfered to the reader. Very nice.
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Just Brilliant
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favorite.
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