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opal
| Midway down the valley, | 1 |
half in light, half in shade, | 2 |
stone sits in the sun, | 3 |
watches seasons change. | 4 |
Sits solid and dense and fixed | 5 |
as it can be. A man observes | 6 |
beauty: strata in stone. | 7 |
His face is grave. | 8 |
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18 Mar 06 |
Rated 8.5 (8.6) by 2 users.
Active (2): 7, 9, 10
Inactive (9): 4, 7, 7, 8, 9, 10, 10, 10
(define the words in this poem)
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solid and stunning. I see great poetry in stones and in this poem. Beautifully sculpted piece. Thank you for it.
— borntodance
Lovely; compact and dense, my mind went 27 different places the second I finished reading, so... thanks for the voyage. I hate to ask, but did you debate even using the word "beauty"? It may be vital, but "A man observes/strata in stone" might be just as effective.
Thanks,
— mikkirat
Very well written poem.
— unknown
A rock is a star in a bin. I really like your style.
— tumbleweed
Thanks to those who've commented - but what's with the raters who aren't giving comments? I sense a bunch of uk malcontents - the morons aren't all from the US -some live on little islands in the middle of the English channel :)
— opal
There goes another one - thanks mercedes.
— unknown
opal can you explain this. i do not find any great meaning in this.
— unknown
Well I still like it.
P. :o)
— unknown
I like this alot. Its interesting, its far from my style but I do cedit that this is well written. Maybe I should get you to teach me a few things sometime.
Im going with a 9 on this.
— XxArsonxX
Thanks XxArsonXx - it varies a bit from my ususal style - but I quite like the play on words - I wanted something where a few words said more than they seemed to at first - if that makes any sense - you seem to have enough talent for both of us,
xx
— opal
2 milestones.
— unknown
nice.
— listen
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