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[L]ove[r]
guy_fawkes

An embarrassing stumble in the waning light,
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the street lights start to flicker on,
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Trying to find the right words
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to say
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to you
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is like:
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trying to pass a sobriety test,
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freezing mid-speech,
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diving in the dark,
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finding a path
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        out of the scorched wasteland of towering                
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        monoliths
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        and concrete pathways that diverge in a gray                              
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        wood
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        at ninety degree angles
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        each path leading to another
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“No Loitering” says the sign,
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but I've forgotten what I came for,
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my mind unforgiven
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my soul runs along the curb with the rain water(thank God
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for the rain that washes the scum and filth off the sidewalks.
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Now I see clearly)
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On the night of corporation-day,
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i'll bow before the giants before me, bathed
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in red, green, and yellow,
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[but only if i'm with you, wasting (y)our time]
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19 Mar 06


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love the title. the poem is good, too, but i need to read it a few more times to crit.
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