i'llikeu in hawaii
i'llikeu with a spoon
i'llikeu up my stairs
i'llikeu in my room
i'llikeu when ulikie
the thoughts upon my wall
i'llikeu drinkin glenomade
i'llikeulookie this one!
ulikie? it's for you!
i'llikeu when u'llookie here
21 Aug 03
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This poem made me smile. I'm sure I'm pronouncing some of the words wrong, but it sounds so cool anyways. Nice work here poet of "I'kkikeu."
Obviuosly you took sounds/words from the Hawaiian language. Clever idea. The last line's great!~Chris King 10/10
This is so much fun to read that I think my grand-daughters would love it. Very clever. Was it as much fun to write?
Whimsical but it works - nice to read something light-hearted.
gnormal, are you a published poet? because you damn well ought to be.
two years, so far, of college english under my belt, and it's rare to see poets as consistently talented as you.
This makes me laugh. I particularly like line 8.
My primary critical comment on this is about the structure: the first verse is all "i'llikeu"s, but the second and third "i'llikeu" only on 1 and 3, and end with exclamations. "Techinically", to keep the formation, I'd suggest that the first verse be modified to fit the pattern of the others, or that it be lengthened, so that the first verse would operate as an intro. But it really doesn't need that.
What might be nice is if the first verse (or something similar, keeping with the nonsensical seduction scheme) was repeated at the end. It doesn't need to be, but if it was then that scheme would be a more solid part of it. But since it's primarily just silly wordplay, I don't know if you'd want to go that route or not.
Heheh. Cute. :)
Hilarious. Very clever use of what could nearly be called gibberish.
Lol. this is great.
hahaha.. this made me laugh =P first paragraph was pretty kinky
I think it's cute!
how naughty-whimsy. hehe it makes me smile.
i like how lines 7-8 break words, it feels slippery.
It works well, but it didn''t make me smile... or laugh, clever though.
too confusing.. clever though
sniceoviu tomake this
awwww. so cute. =)
beautiful!!it´s so cute wow!!it make me laugh!!!! i love it!!!!
this poem invalidates the legitimacy of this site
awww its so cute!!
i couldnt get anyhting from this poem, sorry, love poems are incredibly hard to write well because it has been done so many times before the theme and structure left me going so what?
sorry if i was harsh but i seriously didnt like this poem.
Did you mean to write drinking lemonade, instead of "i'llikeu drinkin glenomade" in line 7?
why say one thing
when you can say two?
why say two
when you can say nothing at all?
No, seriously, I love this poem, it's in my favourites, has beem since the first time I read it. I was just trying to possibly point out an error, as I wasn't sure exactly what you meant.
oh hello! i just bumped into you in the hall where the random poem was suffocatingrass.
oh look someones little kid wrote a poem, how cuuute.
Its weird. The first stanza was ok, but the rest of it makes you sound like a mental patient.
Ha ha! ilikie
What a wonderful, fun random Friday poem. I like this even better two years later.
and this is one em poems
that looks real dumb
but in reality
so much fun
i could see the chipmunks doing dis
next christmas in october
Ohmy. That is by far the stupidest piece of poetry I've ever read!! A favorite.
It helped that I sang it to myself.
makes no sense.
It seems that you are back in fashion! Well deserving.
This is just gibberish. Nothing of substance.
this is so cute, it's almost disgusting. almost. oh man i love it! gahhh.
this reminds me a lot of silverstein's runny babbit. outstanding.
hey, da kine ok for me. when yu coming do haiku for merwin? he da man. we all fine haiku and make luau for all the people here. make the poetry critical rock. that ok.
dumb old fisherman,
poking his stick at the fish:
"die!! stupid poets!!"
Mikebauer is an asshole.
yes, but i can out-write you, out-think you, and i'm funnier too. my dik's only average size though, and maybe yours is bigger? would that make it so you could win?
hey, blue ribbon!!
very cute - I know hawaiian has only 7 letters in the alphabet
do your fun words conform to the hawaiian alphabet?
akshully, that's in local-kind talk, and uses american. hawaiian language sound actually has about 40 sounds to make, but the missionaries reduced the alphabet for simplicity.
It's hard to enjoy your poem when that Asshole mikebauer commented on it.
the bag-lady's back! hi, bag-lady, who you screaming about now? mr. reagan again??
Nice poem about a language from another place i'll never get a chance to visit.
Larry home is where the heart is Lark
really fun and clever
enjoyed thoroughly, classy poem.
ick. Write in english.
YES GNORMAL DO AS UNKNOWN COMMANDS YOU
creative, and very seusslike. I like it, though I find it a little overrated by the others, still good though
This is poetry?
I reckon gnorm must have the 'onesters' by the balls. :)
ilikey that this poem
gets da props that it deserve...
initially, it was a challenge to read it, but once one makes that effort, it all just comes together perfectly. this is something one with a stick up their ass could never get into. I, on the other hand, don't know of nor possess such a frigidity within me-self. yeah! I likey!
This is unique. And I gotta say, that I had to read it over once more because of the spelling.
HAHAHAHAHA! I forgot all about this one. Noodles did something like this about his mother once - it stumps you and then you catch on.
Great humorous writing.
i am reading this in hawaii. right now. how deliciously fitting!! my girlfriend and i are laughing. i esp. love the rhythm to lines 9 and 10!
iredit on the toilet
iredit on the bed
iredit on the kitchen floor
lredit taking med
fun and foolish, it's good to read something that's not morbid, depressed, angry or self consciously intellectual.
now i have a migraine
It's wickedly clever and fun but I'm really struggling with the fact that it's so highly rated.
watch richard struggle.
I'm struggling along with Richard. Cute, but that's about it. To mention it in the same breath as Noodleman's "my thursday poem" is a bit of an insult. Gnorm has written so much better than this.
i'llikeu ulikie this is sweet fun