Comments:
i love the tension in the last line. especially juxtaposed against the first.
the second line seems just like a filler. i'm just being difficult i suppose.
but you could fill it up with as much intensity i think. i'm no writer per say,
but i know how to feel art. i suppose.
-varun-
— unknown
This one is rather brilliant, one of your best I'd say
— Enimie
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