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baptism
hank

tonight i drift
 1
between mexi lager
 2
and sips of tea
 3
another night
 4
forced to home
 5
by pathetics
 6
and all my compassion
 7
rather than raining on them
 8
ends up in the bath
 9
freshwater
 10

20 Mar 06

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ah the pathetics.
i like that.
mine are drips.

7&8 is an interesting contradiction i like.
i feel freshwater after reading this.
 — bettalpha

short and sweet, deceptively not so shallow after all.
 — listen

Hmm.... interesting.  Never saw this little gem b4.
 — aforbing

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