|The Uncertainty Of The Poet(after The Painting By De Chirico)
A marble torso
strewn on the piazza.
Carts clear away
Beneath shadowy arches,
arrival of schooners;
avocado, paw paw,
Trains steam silently
towards mirages of cities.
Restaurant diners dream.
Day break shadows
Juice forms,stalls drip,
across claustrophobic squares.
27 Mar 06
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de chirico suks guava in morocco
which is to say:
Sucks, Morocco,spell check,grammer.
As I have no clue what you are talking about, I refrain from commenting.
Dear Flamin' hot thanks for commenting on not commenting .This poem is written after viewing The Uncertainty Of The Poet a painting by the metaphysical artist Georgio De Chirico and almost all the reference points are in the painting .Maybe you could find it on the internet if you are interested. Thanks anyway
The title is an idiot guide
Like the diner dream
spell check - grammer - grammer? I presume this comment is from a harf wit - spellcheck - half wit. A brilliantly visual and evocative piecr of writing.
Great pic and like the way you've moved beyond the pic.
this here is a fine poem by an accomplished poet and observer.
across claustrophobic squares
thats a wonderful triad there with more assonance than you can shake a stick at
Thanks for taking the time and trouble to post up the link
Larry missing link Lark
I love this. The way you take your inspiration from the painting and embellish its abstract simplicity but still create something very much tied to it. From the marble torso to the claustrophobic squares.
I love the gleaming knives, the hint of the harbour front, the sense of heat.
Oh and by the way, I read and enjoyed the poem's languid atmosphere before I looked at the painting, and it does stand alone IMO.
The title indicates that it is not intended to stand alone.
Yes it does. But I'm just saying that if you don't know the painting, which I didn't (until I checked out the link) it wouldn't spoil the enjoyment of this. Is that ok unknown? :-)
the opening lines
made me think of fishbone
the artist who piled bananas up
in convent garden i think
bananas lend themselves well to art
my favourite appearance of bananas
is in krapp's last tape
i love that play
i like your poem
i like the painting
thank you for introducing me
to some new banana art
So is the poem richer without the context of the painting?
where can you buy this idiot guide,i want to read anything that will assist me in reaching great hights of lunacy. Can you pay in easy instalments.
Some compulsory English grammer lessons might not go amiss here
My Dear Pip
Thanks for your kind and more than generous comments which are much appreciated ,as always
Larry bananas Lark
I take any complement from you as a great honour.Thank you my poetic friend.
I wonder if poems do need to stand on there own if they are describing a painting.Can't a piece of poetry simply complement a work of art.
Indeed it can Larry :-)
i seem to have an awful lot of bananas in my head.
you should see where *my* bananas are.
Yes and i'll bet the're extra bendy.
Larry tropicana Lark
this is beautiful
just wondering why the commas are so close... is all...
the commas are just fine.
( a deal,is a d eal. 1 0 )
Should uncap 'wait' if you are going to write in that style.
It's not so bad.
I like to keep my comma's close so i can clearly see what trickery they are trying to get up to.
love lines 14 and 15
I like this poetic abstraction, even if it did not follow true to the actual picture, and the last line of your poem left me puzzling as what it was, you actually saw, in the scene itself, the square being quite, a quiet square.
The last line therefore, appeared to spoil it for me.
I much would have preferred “un-claustrophobic.”
The Musing of the Poets, by the same artist, is I think a most outstanding picture.
Must dash, I must improve my “grammer” I feel its essential to poetry.
I'd be almost tempted to take you seriously but your excessively patronising tone prevents me from doing so.
I was in Preston yesterday, terrible place; it was snowing, and hailstones, and allsorts of horrible things.
I was there at the invite of a patroness, would you believe.
Don’t forget your happy pill, tweet tweet.
I believe you can get them in packets of “grammer” seed, well, at least at Durham University you can
Wake up, Larry de Larka.
Aphrodite survey’s those banana’s and?
Laugh and Mor people laugh with you,if they have a sense of humour that is
Larry giggle stick Lark
Hi man ,how you doing.Thanks for the comment.I always feel that adverse comments are a positive because if a piece of writing evokes negative comments as well as good then its a winner in my book.Thanks for taking the time to read and pen a few lines.If you wish to look at the painting that inspired this piece of crap,someome further up the page has googled it in so at least you could see the connection between the crap and its source.
you had me fooled for a moment there, have you really nothing better to do ,if not join the club. I specialise in it.We also have a branch in UK if your interested and especially if its closer to home.
Larry nod and a hoodwink Lark
what a bunch of SHIT
Where was the SHIT?Yep i see it now,poking out from under the bananas
Larry shit stick Lark
i wanna go on a vacation when i read these poem. it reminds of a romantic sunlit villa in france or italy?? great imagery
Just about every poet or pretending to be poet has tried to write about their favourite painting, its just that mine ended up sounding like a page out of a travel brochure.
Larry far away places Lark
i think line ten is unecessary as the arrival of the exotic fruits is the important thing and unloading is understood
but its a minor very minor point
and only my opinion
Glad you like it. De Chirico is one of my favourite artists and if i could choose where i could live it would be in an Italian Villa bordering one of his piazza's. I think L10 echies the sound of the O in artichoke through the inclusion of the word unloaded which binds the stanza more effectively together in my view. Thanks for reviving, this, one of my favourite poems i ever wrote about a painting.
Larry metaphysical Lark