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The Uncertainty Of The Poet(after The Painting By De Chirico)
larrylark

A marble torso
 1
surveys bananas
 2
strewn on the piazza.
 3
Carts clear away
 4
 
 
Beneath shadowy arches,
 5
traders applaud
 6
arrival of schooners;
 7
avocado, paw paw,
 8
artichoke, coconut
 9
are unloaded
 10
 
 
Trains steam silently
 11
towards mirages of cities.
 12
Restaurant diners dream.
 13
Gleaming knives
 14
Wait impatiently.
 15
 
 
Day break shadows
 16
cool fruit.
 17
Juice forms,stalls drip,
 18
running rivulets
 19
across claustrophobic squares.
 20

27 Mar 06

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de chirico suks guava in morocco

during sirocco

which is to say:

bop
 — unknown

Dear Unknown

Sucks, Morocco,spell check,grammer.
 — unknown

As I have no clue what you are talking about, I refrain from commenting.
 — flaminhot

Dear Flamin' hot thanks for commenting on not commenting .This poem is written after viewing The Uncertainty Of The Poet a painting by the metaphysical artist Georgio De Chirico and almost all the reference points are in the painting .Maybe you could find it on the internet if you are interested. Thanks anyway

Larry
 — unknown

http://www.tate.org.uk/servlet/ViewWork?workid=2204&tab view=image
 — unknown

The title is an idiot guide

Like the diner dream
 — unknown

spell check - grammer - grammer? I presume this comment is from a harf wit - spellcheck - half wit. A brilliantly visual and evocative piecr of writing.
 — unknown

Great pic and like the way you've moved beyond the pic.

P. :0)
 — unknown

this here is a fine poem by an accomplished poet and observer.
 — noodleman

across claustrophobic squares

thats a wonderful triad there with more assonance than you can shake a stick at
 — noodleman

Dear Unknown

Thanks for taking the time and trouble to post up the link

Larry missing link Lark
 — larrylark

I love this. The way you take your inspiration from the painting and embellish its abstract simplicity but still create something very much tied to it. From the marble torso to the claustrophobic squares.

I love the gleaming knives, the hint of the harbour front, the sense of heat.
 — smugzy

Oh and by the way, I read and enjoyed the poem's languid atmosphere before I looked at the painting, and it does stand alone IMO.

smugzy
 — unknown

The title indicates that it is not intended to stand alone.
 — unknown

Yes it does. But I'm just saying that if you don't know the painting, which I didn't (until I checked out the link) it wouldn't spoil the enjoyment of this. Is that ok unknown? :-)
 — smugzy

the opening lines
made me think of fishbone
the artist who piled bananas up
in convent garden i think

bananas lend themselves well to art
my favourite appearance of bananas
is in krapp's last tape
i love that play

12 toward*?

i like your poem
i like the painting
thank you for introducing me
to some new banana art
 — bettalpha

So is the poem richer without the context of the painting?
 — unknown

Dear Unknown,

where can you buy this idiot guide,i want to read anything that will assist me in reaching great hights of lunacy. Can you pay in easy instalments.
 — larrylark

Dear Unknown


Some compulsory English grammer lessons might not go amiss here
 — unknown

My Dear Pip

Thanks for your kind and more than generous comments which are much appreciated ,as always

Larry bananas Lark
 — larrylark

Dear Noodleman

I take any complement from you as a great honour.Thank you my poetic friend.
 — larrylark

Dear Smugzy

I wonder if poems do need to stand on there own if they are describing a painting.Can't a piece of poetry simply complement a work of art.
 — larrylark

Indeed it can Larry :-)
 — smugzy

Dear Bettalpha

i seem to have an awful lot of bananas in my head.
 — larrylark

you should see where *my* bananas are.
 — unknown

Yes and i'll bet the're extra bendy.

Larry tropicana Lark
 — unknown

this is beautiful
just wondering why the commas are so close... is all...
 — lyom

the commas are just fine.

( a deal,is a d    eal.   1     0     )
 — unknown

Should uncap 'wait' if you are going to write in that style.

It's not so bad.
 — unknown

Dear lyom

I like to keep my comma's close so i can clearly see what trickery they are trying to get up to.

Larry
 — larrylark

love lines 14 and 15
 — Trish77

I like this poetic abstraction, even if it did not follow true to the actual picture, and the last line of your poem left me puzzling as what it was, you actually saw, in the scene itself, the square being quite, a quiet square.

The last line therefore, appeared to spoil it for me.
I much would have preferred “un-claustrophobic.”

The Musing of the Poets, by the same artist, is I think a most outstanding picture.

Must dash, I must improve my “grammer” I feel its essential to poetry.

Morchuis.  
 — Mor

Dear Mor

I'd be almost tempted to take you seriously but your excessively patronising tone prevents me from doing so.

Larry
 — unknown

Hi Larry,

I was in Preston yesterday, terrible place; it was snowing, and hailstones, and allsorts of horrible things.

I was there at the invite of a patroness, would you believe.

Don’t forget your happy pill, tweet tweet.

I believe you can get them in packets of “grammer” seed, well, at least at Durham University you can

Morchuis
 — Mor

Dera Mor

ZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZ

Larry
 — unknown

Wake up, Larry de Larka.

Aphrodite survey’s those banana’s and?


Morchuis.
 — Mor

ZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZ
 — larrylark

lol@you two
 — unknown

Dear unknown

Laugh and Mor people laugh with you,if they have a sense of humour that is

Larry giggle stick Lark
 — larrylark

Dear Wamblicante,

Hi man ,how you doing.Thanks for the comment.I always feel that adverse comments are a positive because if a piece of writing evokes negative comments as well as good then its a winner in my book.Thanks for taking the time to read and pen a few lines.If you wish to look at the painting that inspired this piece of crap,someome further up the page has googled it in so at least you could see the connection between the crap and its source.

Fond regards

Larry
 — larrylark

Hi boys

you had me fooled for a moment there, have you really nothing better to do ,if not join the club. I specialise in it.We also have a branch in UK if your interested and especially if its closer to home.

Larry nod and a hoodwink Lark
 — larrylark

what a bunch of SHIT
 — unknown

Hey Man

Where was the SHIT?Yep i see it now,poking out from under the bananas


Larry shit stick Lark
 — larrylark

i wanna go on a vacation when i read these poem. it reminds of a romantic sunlit villa in france or italy?? great imagery
 — crismonblue

Dera crismonblue

Just about every poet or pretending to be poet has tried to write about their favourite painting, its just that mine ended up sounding like a page out of a travel brochure.

Larry far away places Lark
 — larrylark

absolutely beautiful

i think line ten is unecessary as the arrival of the exotic fruits is the important thing and unloading is understood

but its a minor very minor point

and only my opinion

absolutely beautiful

violet
 — unknown

Hi Violet

Glad you like it. De Chirico is one of my favourite artists and if i could choose where i could live it would be in an Italian Villa bordering one of his piazza's. I think L10 echies the sound of the O in artichoke through the inclusion of the word unloaded which binds the stanza more effectively together in my view. Thanks for reviving, this, one of my favourite poems i ever wrote about a painting.

Larry metaphysical Lark
 — larrylark

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