| my thursday poem
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noodleman
| high wood give | 1 |
a lie half away | 2 |
to hear mime | 3 |
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other’s tulips whisp | 4 |
her aisle of hue | 5 |
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in loving remembrance |
9 Apr 06 |
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happy birthday,
love,
me
— noodleman
This is such an original way of expressing sorrow - as if there are two voices - one painting a picture and the other telling the sentiment - feels like reaching to touch something you know is there yet alludes the grasp,
— opal
are there 2 voices here? i do not see that although it is tempting to bend poet licence to fit that emotional expectation.
— unknown
Great to see this re-posted, although the less than somber circumstance has my fullest and sincere wises and best ears,
ok so now a little more personal,
Sorry bud, it doesn’t get easier out we do learn to adapt, first is points, hen tolerance then anger then life..
— unknown
beautiful
— dedication
i've attempted these kinds of things before, and it's never worked out... you did this very simply, but with obvious thought and sentiment. i usually get annoyed with reposts, but this is an interesting one and is enjoyable to read again. good job.
— gears
i rarely repost anything but today is the anniversary of my mother's birth and death both. she died exactly 5 years ago today. so this is just my way of remembering her. if you like it, i am glad. if you don't like it, go read something else.
— noodleman
simply exquisite. Isabelle5 has been wanting to see this again. She will be delighted.
grace
— borntodance
uh didnt i say i liked it? no need to tell me otherwise :P
— gears
maybe i'm dense, but i don't get it.
— unknown
i'm sorry gears: the first part was addressed to you, the second to the anonymous unashamedly mean people.
— noodleman
i've read this a zillion times, and it's pretty and i like it, but i don't understand it.
— unknown
you don't understand it? Seriously?
I would give
a life away
to hear my mother's
two lips whisper I love you.
Sorry, Noodleman, but he/she didn't get it. Now read my lips. my tulips. my two lips. I read praille. with a p. sheesh. test dummies need crash helmets.
— unknown
It's not "a life away." Seems you didn't get it either, unknown.
— claudia
It's not clear, never was. Out of respect for the departed I won't score.
— unknown
im not interested in scores, so thanks. i just do this out of rememberance for my mom. nobodies scores mean anything. and yes, claudia is right. close, unknown, though. its all i have.
peace
— noodleman
Must be why you had a pop at those mean people ;)
— unknown
Still love this and still feel sad whenever I read it.
— Isabelle5
" all I have," not " a life"
beautiful.
— unknown
oh, sorry noodlemand, my mistake :P
— gears
thank you so much for reposting this. it means A LOT. <3 i love you.
my favorite poem in the world.
~duckie
— ducktape
lovely.- k
— pghpoet
Yes, I was sad to find it disappeared from my favourites list some time ago. Glad you reposted it.
Need more poets like you now...
— DeathShards
thats a very kind thing to say.
— noodleman
It use to be on my kitchen wall at home ( ask B ) . Most of my friends do not read/have never read any poetry , It was time well spent watching them try and work it out .
Thank you .
— sir_I_clan
thankyo utoo.
— noodleman
i love you, noodles!
— ducktape
Wasn't the first one "I would give up all I have.."?
— unknown
still beautiful
— unknown
hokay-
unnerstoood.
just never looked at the other
that way, is all...
u eyes better than mine!
— unknown
well said
said well
said well
well said
— chuckles
imus ewe
— unknown
why me? why do i subject myself to this crap? don't answer that I'm not interested.
— unknown
Exquisite. Always brings a lump to my throat. Thanks noodles.
— smugzy
other's tulips whips
her aisle of hue
the poet betrays
their beauty
in words
wonderful poem
— Mongrol
whips = whisp
oops :)
— Mongrol
very nice, nice indeed
— Redlander
lovely!!!
elephant shoes
— unknown
Since you were truthful enough about my poem now I can say I didn't think it was at all good, I was just being polite.
— Redlander
hey noodleman I was taking about your poem
— Redlander
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