my thursday poem
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noodleman
| high wood give | 1 |
a lie half away | 2 |
to hear mime | 3 |
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other’s tulips whisp | 4 |
her aisle of hue | 5 |
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in loving remembrance | 9 Apr 06 |
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happy birthday,
love,
me — noodleman
This is such an original way of expressing sorrow - as if there are two voices - one painting a picture and the other telling the sentiment - feels like reaching to touch something you know is there yet alludes the grasp, — opal
are there 2 voices here? i do not see that although it is tempting to bend poet licence to fit that emotional expectation. — unknown
Great to see this re-posted, although the less than somber circumstance has my fullest and sincere wises and best ears,
ok so now a little more personal,
Sorry bud, it doesn’t get easier out we do learn to adapt, first is points, hen tolerance then anger then life.. — unknown
beautiful — dedication
i've attempted these kinds of things before, and it's never worked out... you did this very simply, but with obvious thought and sentiment. i usually get annoyed with reposts, but this is an interesting one and is enjoyable to read again. good job. — gears
i rarely repost anything but today is the anniversary of my mother's birth and death both. she died exactly 5 years ago today. so this is just my way of remembering her. if you like it, i am glad. if you don't like it, go read something else. — noodleman
simply exquisite. Isabelle5 has been wanting to see this again. She will be delighted.
grace — borntodance
uh didnt i say i liked it? no need to tell me otherwise :P — gears
maybe i'm dense, but i don't get it. — unknown
i'm sorry gears: the first part was addressed to you, the second to the anonymous unashamedly mean people. — noodleman
i've read this a zillion times, and it's pretty and i like it, but i don't understand it. — unknown
you don't understand it? Seriously?
I would give
a life away
to hear my mother's
two lips whisper I love you.
Sorry, Noodleman, but he/she didn't get it. Now read my lips. my tulips. my two lips. I read praille. with a p. sheesh. test dummies need crash helmets. — unknown
It's not "a life away." Seems you didn't get it either, unknown. — claudia
It's not clear, never was. Out of respect for the departed I won't score. — unknown
im not interested in scores, so thanks. i just do this out of rememberance for my mom. nobodies scores mean anything. and yes, claudia is right. close, unknown, though. its all i have.
peace — noodleman
Must be why you had a pop at those mean people ;) — unknown
Still love this and still feel sad whenever I read it. — Isabelle5
" all I have," not " a life"
beautiful. — unknown
oh, sorry noodlemand, my mistake :P — gears
thank you so much for reposting this. it means A LOT. <3 i love you.
my favorite poem in the world.
~duckie — ducktape
lovely.- k — pghpoet
Yes, I was sad to find it disappeared from my favourites list some time ago. Glad you reposted it.
Need more poets like you now... — DeathShards
thats a very kind thing to say. — noodleman
It use to be on my kitchen wall at home ( ask B ) . Most of my friends do not read/have never read any poetry , It was time well spent watching them try and work it out .
Thank you . — sir_I_clan
thankyo utoo. — noodleman
i love you, noodles! — ducktape
Wasn't the first one "I would give up all I have.."? — unknown
still beautiful — unknown
hokay-
unnerstoood.
just never looked at the other
that way, is all...
u eyes better than mine! — unknown
well said
said well
said well
well said — chuckles
imus ewe — unknown
why me? why do i subject myself to this crap? don't answer that I'm not interested. — unknown
Exquisite. Always brings a lump to my throat. Thanks noodles. — smugzy
other's tulips whips
her aisle of hue
the poet betrays
their beauty
in words
wonderful poem — Mongrol
whips = whisp
oops :) — Mongrol
very nice, nice indeed — Redlander
lovely!!!
elephant shoes — unknown
Since you were truthful enough about my poem now I can say I didn't think it was at all good, I was just being polite. — Redlander
hey noodleman I was taking about your poem — Redlander
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