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a short silent plea / for he that i am lacking:
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fair-eyes, in your supposed quiet:
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          wait for me.
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          because, to play honestly:
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          in thinking of your openhanded
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          endowed seconds
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          in my sight, in my mind;
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          they seem to me
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          to
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          build seperate eternities
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          in my conciousness,
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you; mute, unmoving.
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spanish language speaker, black coffee drinker.

8 May 06

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sublime opening
in places i might replace words with metaphor
or more of those sublime turns of phrases
when they turn your words shine
 — bettalpha

Art isn't poetry.  Thankfully.
 — Meep

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