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The Lie
netskyIam

Depending on the lie
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the dead fix eyes
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toward the sky
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while the living preoccupy
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with flirting
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horizontal glances.
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In itself the most
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the sky
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disregards them all.
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---revison space:
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Depending on the lie believed,
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the dead fix their eyes toward the sky.
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Fairly true, the living do
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shoot flirts in horizontal glances.
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Self-contained the most,
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the sky
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disregards them all.
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26 May 06


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Dead eyes fix on nothing. They are dead. No focus. No distance.

While you've used the word toward correctly, I give no more.
 — DianaTrees

it is a meaning diana which I see now you don't know much about meanings
 — Phoenix567

relax, thanks. duplex a meaning to "lie".  shhhh.. 'nuff said.
small verse is meant to be sensed in multiple ways here.
 — netskyIam

How incredibly deep.



NOT!
 — unknown

Idea: new title "how incredibly deep".  lol!   It isn't deep, just thoughtful
 — netskyIam

Some people should just stop thinking.
 — unknown

New title and new line breaks.
This verse was inspired by PC's musicwords
 — netskyIam

"Idea: new title "how incredibly deep".  lol!   It isn't deep, just thoughtful
— netskyIam "

ROFLOLZ
 — lacklusterrr

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