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our nature tends to make us unnatural
hank

when you start to look ugly
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which can never happen really
 2
but will
 3
in your eyes
 4
uglier than you thought you were
 5
because you were better once
 6
maybe you get shocked or pissed
 7
or mad or glum and forget
 8
it is natural to get ugly but not
 9
natural to believe it
 10

21 Jul 06

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yeah, but; no, but; yeah, but; no, but...
 — unknown

one of the best comments i've received in a long time. thanks.
 — hank

tha's why god created moles..
 — crepaway

absolute bit of wit there creep.
 — hank

thank goodness i'm writing poetry again that rates ones. haven't had a one since 'ball'. (but that's probably not true).
 — hank

(me no give 1'sss) this feels like Richard Brautigan's poem (   ) <-- cant recall title  
 — crepaway

insightful, had to read it twice to understand lines 2 to 5, not a great flow there. but i like your poem.
 — bleach

new poems
 — varun

i still believe this.
 — hank

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