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Prys into Apparel
netskyIam

Does the Pakistani
 1
pack turbans
 2
inside of his turban?
 3
And under the Clydesman's wool kilt
 4
--prunes wilt?
 5
 
 
Explain please the clop of Old Dutch
 6
Willm-you?
 7
if you haven't a tap
 8
and no sort of soft shoe.
 9
 
 
Does a jock wear the air
 10
whenever unstrapped?
 11
Did the Flying Nun crease
 12
her winged hat
 13
when she napped?
 14
I could quiz Sally Fields--
 15
'though I'd rather pry you.
 16
 
 
whatever you don
 17
 
 
if it's something I don't
 18
 
 
exactly precisely
 19
just   how   do...
 20
 
 
 
 
"#%$*!!!!"
 21
 
 
 
 
...you won't???
 22
 
 
Shame of the world
 23
--such rudeness!
 24

4 Sep 06


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Comments:

Too cryptic for me in my Monday suit.
 — Caducus

i would concentrate your rubber (eraser) on

8-9 the  negative constructions are working against  the meaning. here it should be hard shoe not soft shoe to make sense. i think.

15-16, take the first line out (or rewrite) and smooth

paki and jock are derogatory. and the whole example and conclusion structure isn't as good a fit as it could be, yet, it seems like this has the making of one of your more leary ones though. hurrah.
 — bettalpha

Better fixed now.  I hope the world of jocks does not take offense. (lol)
 — netskyIam

it's got a title now and is basically done.

how bad is it? I can't tell.  I just know that I"m capable of writing wonderful stuff that's

really plain ol' shite! lol.

r.
 — netskyIam

osssst, well then....howz about a l'il sniff den???  hhahahahahah
 — netskyIam

unappealing apparitions inappropriately applied
 — unknown

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