|poem by alex.
i can promise you two things.
one is despair and the other
is despair. each is a different color
i'm not sure why.
9 Sep 06
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ok who is alex - a kid?
Give me the different colors... and textures, too. I know this messes the brevity, but I want so much more.
something fishy this way comes
drop line 4
I'm not sure why either. I don't know if you weren't told, but a capital letter follows a full stop! Come on, you know that, a bit of proof reading before posting saves a lot of blushes. Poignant and clever? Maybe, depending on the colours!!
I guess you're a stiff cold corpse with a hardon for punctuation.
in my experience on resorts to calling names when one has nothing better to say.
You proved the other persons point.
What kind of Republican logic is that, unknown?
If X calls W a tool, it does not prove W's point at all.
W is still a tool.
calling someone a tool does not make that person a tool
If I said you were a butt sniffing poofter would it be true
I hope not
i can promise you
two things. one is despair
and the other
is despair. each is
a different color i'm not,
Titles don't need periods, they are not a sentence, first of all.
Second of all - What?
I want to write this on my face.
we are in 2006. who the fuck cares about punctuation. put the damn period wherever you please :)
oh and i like it :) i'm not sure why :)
Modern nomad, one thing we Do here is critique the entire poem - spelling, punctuation, content. Don't discount the importance of the small things. It might be 2006 but this is still poetry and some rules apply - although we have small wars about it.
I don't want to offend anyone, but I think this poem looks fine as it is and would be lovely written across my face in every color that applies.
I agree with Mikki, I want more. I love the idea that you get the same thing but it comes differently.
isabelle, totally with you. critique includes from A to Z. and my personal take on punctuation is that its at the writer's disposal. (s)he can do what (s)he wants with it. i don't think we should limit poetry to whatever rules are out there.
Thank you guys. I love you.
The period is there, I suppose, for my own personal comfort.
If it wasn't there I feel like I would read it without a pause right into the poem.
I'd go crashing into the poem.
I am wearing a blazer.
but what colour is the blazer today?!
nice short poem :)
it's plaid of coat.