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sungod
hank

bloodorange
 1
whentoward
 2
eyeshut
 3
missingson
 4

20 Sep 06

Rated 8 (8) by 1 users.
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Inactive (1): 8, 8

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Dark and strange but I like it!
 — bleach

scary image in a small space.. could you swap l3 & l4?  just a thought
 — oracle

interesting comments. thank you. did think of dark when writing this, but only the dark behind the eyes when it is dark, or normal, had to axe it all because just wanted to talk about the experience of closed eyes pointed toward the sun.  why scary? l3 and l4 were swapped. decided upon this verbage.

thanks for comments. very interesting.
 — hank

scary because less words allow more imagination..

sun
god
look
blind
son
sacrifice
 — oracle

"and like icarus in heaven, i collide"
 — oracle

Hmmm. This is different, but I did think it was good even for its size.
Im going to go with an 8 this time.
 — XxArsonxX

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