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House Proud.
larrylark

Many days I wander
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among stuffed furnishings,
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replete in my trendy pinny
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stamped with  picture of old wine drinkers
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staring out at death from a single bench
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in some distant French village.
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It’s the dust below their feet
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that chokes this carpet,
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hiding floral patterns
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faint hint of chinoiserie.
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Their wine stains spread like ink
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on blotting paper,
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disgusting tobacco spumes
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rain onto the fire, sizzling coals in the grate.
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Why do I clean up the lives of others?
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Why am I not sat on a rough bench
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staining my tongue deep purple
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with rouge vin du table , waiting for the bell
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to toll me in to a huge dinner
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of simple peasant fayre?
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So I can pretend, more or less,
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I didn’t make this disgusting mess
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9 Oct 06

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 — unknown

eh? See the loony Brit faction is at it again (not you larry) not surprised you quit the barmy brit club.
 — unknown

Dear Unknow

The utterly tediuos twaddle that fascinates and engages humans never ceases to amaze mere idiots like myself.

Larry what a bore Lark
 — larrylark

Dear Unknown

most people are harmless idiots. Some are fools who try to wrap themselves in cloaks of gold.

Larry hair shirt Lark
 — larrylark

I don't understand what mess you are talking about but your words are WOW! I love the individual imagery. You are really talented. I hve to give you a 9 simply for invoking such imagery. Think of what you could do if all the these images really connected in an entire train of thought. You are a WOW!
 — NeighborDi

Dear Neighbour Di

What can i say. Glad you enjoyed this one.

Larry needle and the damage done Lark
 — larrylark

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