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Empty on Empathy,
netskyIam

I met a fellow just today
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who looks to be a poem-prospect!
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"Jimmy Stufu" from Tobago,
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where he used to live until
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they "let him go" (deported Jim)
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for chronic-form misapprehensions.
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He said to me, or meant to say,
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"Pardon me, I'd like to date
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your sister. Such a gorgeous chick."
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Jimmy Stufu: suffering
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from an odd, a very odd,
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verbal pattern--sort of a
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stammer possibly Tourettes';
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or, perhaps something rather rarer.
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Every day in every speech,
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Jim adds unneeded syllables
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to words he speaks, like  "sister".
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He said to me, in earnest, he,
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"Pardon me, I'd like to date
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your sisterblister.
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Such a gorgeous chicken."
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Impediments gimp more than verbals;
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if your name is Jimmy Stufu
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bumps, abrasions, black eyes are
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side effects of your condition-
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ition
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24 Oct 06

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Cool poem , I liken to last stanza very muchly
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