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AtomBombJohn
| when you leave clothes here | 1 |
I let them lie | 2 |
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hoping they will sprout | 3 |
and grow you | 4 |
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25 Oct 06 |
Rated 8 (7.9) by 25 users.
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I like this. I'm not sure if it's clever or just late, but either way, I definately felt a "Ha!" moment there. and I liked it.
— SteelAngel
bittersweet and deep.
— Artemis
Oh, sweet. Feels almost like a haiku. I like it.
— septima_pica
This is heartbreaking, lovely.
— rattlesnakes
i liked this. it was short though full of vividness. and emotion. almost wanting it to happen though i can't do anything for you. very good!
— misterpoet
thank you all for the support
— AtomBombJohn
This is great.
Clever and cool.
— Krttika
very clever, especially when thinking about the myriad of other insifficiently meaningful ways to say "I miss you"
thank you
Maria
— slancho
its strange, but it has a nice simplicity.
— topop
I think the title should be included in the poem for it to make sense, but I like the bizzarity anbd originality here.
— icepineapple
I love this. Immensely.
— modestmuse
That's beautiful. I apologise for not knowing enough about poetry to say anything else but I love this.
— Courtney01
cute
— FolleRouge
I have to say, I almost cried.
— Joanie_UND
not bad.
— aerol
i like it. a lot.
— andreamarie
are we dancing in the parade of disco lights yet? this could be the beginning of a good poem; this as is stands incomplete. i'm left humming the tune because I know only half of the lyrics, catch me now Laika?
— unknown
how adorable.
— marshponds
Delightful.
— unknown
I have read this many times since you posted, and I just love it.
It reminds me of the longing and uncertainty I felt when I first fell in love with my boyfriend.
His boxers sprouted not too long ago, and now I have a magnolia tree in the backyard to remind me of his love when he's not here.
Really beautiful way to express a situation so many of us have felt.
Thankyou!
— jenakajoffer
Oh yes, I love the title too.
Jen-
— jenakajoffer
I'd change lay to lie. Other than that (and lack of punctuation), this is cute.
— Isabelle5
Simplicity. This is wonderful, and I don't think you need two more lines or even one more. You say it all. 10 points for two lines and a title that sum up what volumes of poetry have blabbered on about through the centuries.
— NeighborDi
i love it.
— slowtesque
very cute.
— KaliDevi
Very Charlie Brownesque. 8/10
— Henry
I thought you hated French ... ?
— unknown
yeah, i love it. very clever. wish i wrote this. hehehe.
— adhector
wonderfully clever...i like this
— GreenDreams
I am in love with this, it's so short, but powerfully conveys an entire stream of memory and emotions.
— aftershock
fantastic!
— mister9a
what happened to the rest of this? i liked it the first time i read it. it's good as is, but it seems incomplete. it wasn't long or wordy as it was. maybe i just feel that way because i know there used to be more, but i liked the rest of it too. maybe you should post both, as there seems to be 2 schools of thought on this one. :)
— balancing
issable was correct it should be lie
— unknown
this is how it's always been, I assure you.
— AtomBombJohn
heh. i remembered it painting such a vivid picture the first time i read it i thought there must have been more. the sign of something good. and a sign i need more sleep or something...lol.
— balancing
nice poem
— sir_I_clan
So sweet, makes my sourness dissolve, well maybe just a bit.
Larry po face lark
— larrylark
I wasn't too crazy about the title, but I certainly liked the poem itself.
— mrkhoo
This is great! Exactly the thing to whisper in your lover's ear to keep them there...if just for a second longer.
— grneyeddevil
So cute!
— themolly
i always loved this poem.
— jenakajoffer
"A Softer World" much?
Still -- really good.
— unknown
d'aww. :3
— Aziel
oh wow.
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— JL
just beautiful.
: )
— fractalcore
Clever, concise, endearing.
— candykid
wow! i love this!
— enkantada
wow....
— FrayedSkirt
this is short and sweet, and maybe a little sappy and overly sentimental.
but it brought a genuine smile to my lips, and it made me think of my special someone.
very nice.
— shakeit
been there.
— humblebee
very powerful.
— chriscampbel
yes very sweet and a cleverness without the contrived quality of over thinking the metaphor -- a ten then
— AlchemiA
love it.
— brokenarrows
This is wonderful. Only one word or two away from being maudlin, so you stopped just in the nick of time.
nice work.
— zylan
if those two sets of lines were a pair of lips i would kiss them. this poem precious in the best sense of the word.
— mousestmod
It's cute.
— propoet50
I love this.
— sharpheart
Haha, really pretty, great image.
— technomancer
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