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Demon Angel
larrylark

Billy was a demon
 1
so Auntie Margie said,
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and Aunty Marge was always right,
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being half way off her head.
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Billy was an angel,
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his mummy loved him so.
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He had long silky lashes,
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skin white as midnight snow.
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Billy burned his daddy's pub
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while daddy was inside.
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"I couldn't stand his beery ways,
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he should have sipped fine wine."
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Mummy dressed up Billy
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and put him in a show.
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He played with Margot Fontaine,
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while dancing on her toes.
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He sang just like an angel,
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achieve the heights of fame,
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but when they came for income tax,
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he blew them all away.
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His trial was an injustice,
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he was hanged in Drury Lane.
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He died like all true artistes,
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a bitch in constant pain.
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26 Oct 06

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" in line 12 and line 18 heights
 — trochee

Thanks for L18 Trochee but where in L12? You need to be more specific.

Larry spell check Lark
 — larrylark

Thankee trochee - spotted it - speechmarks - tavery much,

larry speechless lark.
 — larrylark

It reminded me of Oscar Wilde - the ballad(ish) rhythm really plays up to the subject matter. One of your best larry.
 — unknown

u rock.really. i love your poems.
-miss_minx
 — unknown

Dear Unknown,

I forgot i wrote this but as i was idly searching my funny box this morning......

Larry hidden depths Lark
 — larrylark

Dear Miss Minx,

How can i rock at my time of life? Why i do declare it takes me an hour to roll out of bed in the morning. Thanks for you comment which i will treasure always.

Larry OAP Lark
 — larrylark

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