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CecdiPeace
| Wanting more | 1 |
Everlasting | 2 |
Wanting more | 3 |
Dreaming of it | 4 |
Believing in it | 5 |
seeing the light | 6 |
Hiding the dark | 7 |
Hiding my dark | 8 |
Will you wait? | 9 |
Or will you stand? | 10 |
Will you reach down-- | 11 |
Or will you run | 12 |
Will you hide | 13 |
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I am afraid | 14 |
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15 Nov 06 |
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I found myself 'wanting more' concrete images, I just thought it 'lacked' something to grab onto. I couldn't really grasp it with the abstract words like 'dreaming' and 'believing'.
— marshponds
Thanks- but I guess we see things differently. This is not one of my best poems, I'll admitt, but I thought I'd give it a go. I like it's shortness and it's openness to interpretation- but of course, it is my poem. I've posted another- maybe you'll want to see what you think of that. I personally don't like to be concrete, but perhaps I could use more desciptive words...I'll consider it.
— CecdiPeace
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