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I found myself 'wanting more' concrete images, I just thought it 'lacked' something to grab onto. I couldn't really grasp it with the abstract words like 'dreaming' and 'believing'. — marshponds
Thanks- but I guess we see things differently. This is not one of my best poems, I'll admitt, but I thought I'd give it a go. I like it's shortness and it's openness to interpretation- but of course, it is my poem. I've posted another- maybe you'll want to see what you think of that. I personally don't like to be concrete, but perhaps I could use more desciptive words...I'll consider it. — CecdiPeace
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