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a little of your time that i initially considered mine (own time)
hank

i have a quick opportunity
 1
as they often are
 2
split gone
 3
then you feel blurried
 4
 
 
but let's not get carried
 5
away i have
 6
an opportunity (that i'm not buying)
 7
to use on you
 8

16 Dec 06

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i like this. its nice- short and simple.
L4 i think should be blurred
and i suggest that you should reconsider using a different title. i think this one it too long...
 — x2jocelyn2x

You should keep BLURRIED. Have you considered three stanzas instead of two?
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