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The Preacher--Vice
netskyIam

When I speak I cast out spells.
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Can you hear the S in "vice"?
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No! So I'll tell you now about the s q u e e z e
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the devil puts upon those  fools
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who park their heads inside his vices.
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The devil
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oh, he cranks the screws;
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he wants to crush the good in you
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in any of his many vises.
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Conform instead to God's  A.D.vice
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and clamp yourself to Jesus
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20 Dec 06

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you have a new fancy. religion. and it's good
this is very polished nets and very good

check this guy out you might like, i like

http://poetry.tetto.o rg/~mikebauer/

ps. what happened to your flying butter pan. i lost it and it's a big favourite
please help me find it.

love
 — bettalpha

Netsky, I'm not suggesting you use my changes.I found myself reading 2 poems in one, maybe i have missed all the intricacies of your musings.

When I speak I cast out
spells, can you hear the S in "vice"


No! So I'll tell you now about the s q u e e z e
the devil puts upon fools
who park their heads inside his vice.

oh, he screws those cranks
to crush the good in us
in any of his vises

Conform instead to this A.D. vice.
Clamp yourself to Jesus
You will fall regardless
 — unknown

Thank you both. I'll refine this poem in time.
A UK reader elsewhere told me that "vice" means "vise" in their language.
If that's so, then the wordplay premise of the poem fails for Britishers, etc.
A vise is usually a screw-clamped device.  There are various subtle ambiguities in the item; that's my style, my worst and best vice, I guess.  lol at me, I hope.
r.
 — netskyIam

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