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impatient immortality
chuckles

some times
 1
 
 
yesterday still
 2
then is dead
 3
gone by when
 4
 
 
rarely was
 5
 
 
once and never shall shortly
 6
be but wait
 7
as
 8
soon as now is over
 9
after is next
 10
 
 
ever before later now
 11
always soon
 12
in a trice
 13
 
 
twice becomes thrice becomes
 14
 
 
last will be seldom
 15
yet nonce creeps
 16
to last
 17
 
 
while
 18
 
 
often is now
 19
sometimes
 20

21 Dec 06

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kill the article in line 15 for rhythm and need.

Decent work, with near inversions a double/triple speak, forward and backward.
 — DianaTrees

Last night my son asked me a question that I almost could've answered if I'd already read this poem.

I usually don't like this style--no punctuation--but I do like this one.
 — unknown

Chuckles!  So nice to see tis you.
 — unknown

removed "the" L15

we'll see how it seems...

thx dt
 — chuckles

This reads just like my brain. I enjoyed it.
 — SarahMichele

line 14 is wonderfull, its got a beat.
 — SenorSin

hahaha this is clever.
great ending.
*shuts his mouth and clicks on "add this poem to your favorites"*
 — trochee

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