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for family an' blake through neil (white contraction)
hank

this painting in the stable i'm doing i enjoy
 1
it makes the place look clean and happy
 2
the mouse ain't happy though
 3
he had to spring clean early
 4
i'm probably anal about the spiders though
 5
 
 
it's emulsion stuff that the english use
 6
now i get those west indian painted rocks
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it's thick and covers well even in cold which it ain't
 8
right now no snow but even so you put a warm arm in it
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more like a therapy paste than a paint
 10
it's all 'bout the patient application i learned
 11
 
 
and while i'm down there doin' it
 12
i'm listening to a little coincidence
 13
and every time i'm hearing it i'm thinkin'
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blake would have stick'd me for not makin' note
 15
for not writin' down the occurrence of her
 16
an' on my shell sh'cops a welc'med ride
 17
"look out mama there's a white boat comin' up the river"
 18

for Barbara Ethel Bialowas. 1915-2006.

14 Jan 07

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I hope Barbara Ethel Bialowas liked it...if she got to read it before she passed on. Um...the first stanza was nice and a lot like a narration, but it went downhill as it went on. The first stanza was well worth reading though...I applaud you for that Hank. 7/10
 — Henry

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