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kisses, an ending.
OKcomputer

movement dividing
 1
the space between two figures
 2
seeks to dismiss what's plural.
 3
 
 
they will never,i say,
 4
move closer,
 5
they will never say,
 6
i have met
 7
warm company
 8
for ever-
 9
 
 
and so, they say
 10
good-bye,
 11
we tried.
 12

22 Jan 07

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this is niiiiiiice!

i love the first stanza. Very creative way to show two figures moving apart.
though i wanted something more in the 2nd stanza. but i think the lesser it is .. the more concerning i get as a reader... so it works for me.

i like the ending too..
 — trochee

Oh i am glad its you... OkComputer ... i always wanted to read some of your work.
 — trochee

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I hear she has a smelly muff
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