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Fatal Journey
larrylark

Always go Express Bus.
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Snake down the motorway,
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criss crossing, picks up
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at faceless places, no fuss,
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Widnes through Newton Le Willows,
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still fields beyond low hills,
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unpromising heartland slowly drifts past.
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My fellow passenger thought  himself
 8
a man apart; unique in his traveling methods.
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“Out at dawn, mow the lawn, never fly.
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It’s the way I take my time,
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rain, hail, shine, or  threatening weather.”
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-Showed him the wart sliced from  Garbo’s lover,
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cat’s eye preserved in aspic and gin.
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Toenail clippings from Presley’s sanctum,
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faceless assassin with a smiling grin.
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Teeth mark of Brando embedded in onion,
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dagger that bled an arterial vein.
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phial discovered in  Marilyn’s handbag
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large body part found deep in a drain.-
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Always stop at Nantwich,
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sandwich taken with cup of tea.
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When I returned he was nowhere,
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driver head counted, but he could not  be seen.
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-Here is the prayer book thumbed by Rasputin,
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button from Hitler’s grey dressing gown.
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Deep down among the folds of my suitcase,
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anthrax spores, maps of innocuous towns-.
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11 Feb 07

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do i smell cataloguing? anyway, unimportant ... (except that it adds intrigue to the poem. creative.) this is nice, either way.
 — listen

Dear Listen,

Its amazing what gets collected as we pass alomg the motorways of life.

Larry old Ford car, it don't go too far Lark
 — larrylark

The first stanza is brilliant. The sense of place is evoked so well - I had to stop and say that before I read the rest - but then found the rest is equally excellent - I just didn't expect him to disappear at the end - fantastic writing.
 — unknown

Dear Unknown

He had to disappear at that point because i had run out of ink

Larry old biro's lark
 — larrylark

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