Comments:
Is cute and short. Needs punctuation. — PollyReg
congratulations.
-v — unknown
Lovely, I agree though, it does need punctuation. — sisotowbel
after re-reading, i'm not really sure where i would put punctuation. — hank
a single, sleepy, innocent cough from the distant bedroom where you sleep, and our home becomes an infirmary
but it's a personal thing - you might just prefer not to punctuate, which is fair enough. Its just that I feel the need to imagine how it is punctuated - otherwise it reads robotically in my head. — sisotowbel
with a single sleepy innocent cough from the distant bedroom where you sleep
our home becomes and infirmary
v. — unknown
henh.
'an'.
nice poem hank.
how are ya?
v. — unknown
why an infirmary rather than a sanctuary ? — Mongrol
yesyesyes
i like your scene.
familiar
that is one wordy
little cough, dontcha think?
enjoy 'em... — chuckles
a single sleepy
innocent cough
from the distant bedroom
where you sleep
and
our home becomes an infirmary
this way you wont need any (punctuation). — trochee
ha ha, funny old random — unknown
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