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Just one word will do it
ducktape

Just a miscommunication...
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I never knew you'd respond so sharp.
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I never knew I'd end up sitting at home
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staring at the screaming phone
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I wish the noises would all go away.
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I'm holding back my tears...
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I haven't had that prolonged pain for some time.
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I haven't a clue what to say to you
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when I've had such little sleep
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I wish I could get off this rollercoaster.
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I've always hated ignoring people...
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I never knew what to do after avoidance.
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I never knew it'd be this hard to watch you
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hanging on the other end like that
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I wish I could start this all over again.
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Just a miscommunication...
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Just one word will do it.
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I would have a breakdown to say it
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because I love you so much
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Goodbye.
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I don't know what to do.....oh my God.  I really can't hold it in this time.

28 Feb 07

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painful, and im very sorry. i certainly hope things get better for you.
as for your poem, it's effective but not impressive. try showing more telling less, if you know what i mean.
 — wemsntdspair

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