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Whatever the face that you are in
there is someone who loves
to look at you, someone
who could be me

23 Mar 07

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well said :)
 — punua_maikai

As the face is indefinite might 'could' be better then 'would' in L4? I think I would use cap to begin, but this is very charming and an example of less being more which should encourage many a writerr to hone the inessentials when they actually have something to say.
 — unknown

Thank you both.  I have made that small and good change by your guidance.
Very nice of you.  "Homely" used to be a gentle word.  
I think plain people are rich people; more free in a basic way...do they know this?
 — netskyIam