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Tired Poet, why do you weep?
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Oh, sad scribe, under with you
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into the covers, twitching madly and hearing the drum beats.
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following this you do cry over, the same phrase
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repeating in your head traditionally
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to make you cry harder, faster and with gasping.
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there is no one in the world who
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can hold your hand with such a grip
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that he can come closer into you
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to someplace unknowable.
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sad crying poet, please
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repeat the same phrases without stopping
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because when they become worn in mine ears
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i can solve the --
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the subordinates there below our feet
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you and i, genius baaaby.
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i glance at them
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momentarily
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sometimes. they.
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29 Mar 07

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Great voice, but you seem to be trying too hard with the flowery language. It's confusing and hard to read; keep the language modern and you'll be fine.

PS: The last four lines of the first stanza are my favorite. :-)
 — BrideInBlack

It seems incomplete and leaves me wondering. I guess the conclusion is left to the imagination.
 — fallentears

love you
 — unknown

very nice.
 — unknown

i think there's maybe caxtus crumbs in between the covers. he may be weeping cause you're the best that's going to write about him.
 — joey

because it's raining on the rock
in a beautiful country
and i'm wishing on a postcard
that you were here with me

apologies to ukw
 — unknown

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