Beautiful piece!! I love everything. Though I don't understand how the title fits in. — BrideInBlack
found it in my book. had no title. but it had a date. — hank
So it's a found poem? Or is it a piece you wrote long ago and just dated instead of naming it? — BrideInBlack
no, i have a problem with lying. if it were a found poem i would title it so. see 'found words- tobago' or 'killing bat'. the second part of your question is the right one. just some writing in a book with a date.
which generally i never do. my posted poems on this website are a stream of consciousness. this poem and 'cowskins on sheepskins' are the only insertions. (written at a previous time) i guess they are anachronisms. — hank
That's cool. My poems so far have been insertions, and I intend for all of them to be that way. I'm too much of a self-critic to trust myself to write a stream-of-consciousness worthy of being read by others. — BrideInBlack
amazing imagery and detail. i love when raindrops do that. 9 — infinity
i like this! i never saw it.
"summon my breath" is a little too poemy for me.
but you should probably preserve it as found because this presentation works nice (found it in a book). — gnormal
agreed. wish i could write like this.
: ) — fractalcore
i'm not a huge fan of similes - but raindrops like a silver gelatin mondrian works for me :) — Mongrol
Love it. Not many people can put that much imagery into a short poem.
I think you might enjoy some of William Carlos Williams' short poetry.
here is a little crystal with many reflections -- when a Poet can capture Nature with a few skilfully rendered words he can create many a masterpiece -- child like in its view with Zeus the Thunder God blowing hurricanes through Window panes -- l1 the first 'the' is it necessary? — AlchemiA
maybe not. i overuse 'the' and 'and'.
i like the way this one looks. — hank