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the girl under the tree
OKcomputer

she seemed like a decent human being:
 1
under the pink blooming
 2
trees it was beautiful
 3
and i was disillusioned
 4
to believe in her
 5
more than most people, because of
 6
spring and because of that moment
 7
in which she passed
 8
underneath the
 9
pink blossoming
 10
tree. it became
 11
her and she wore
 12
it for a moment
 13
above her head and it
 14
complemented her and
 15
i fell in love, i think
 16
with her idea, how
 17
she was mystified by
 18
that moment, and how.
 19
and how she walked away
 20
from the beautiful tree
 21
as a superior thing,
 22
unmoved. she was
 23
better than it and i
 24
compared her to it and
 25
loved her better than the
 26
image of the tree.
 27
she was prettier, a
 28
better thing born, and
 29
i cannot kiss a tree.
 30
however beautiful, it does not
 31
compare. i cannot make
 32
love to a tree, i cannot tongue it and grip it into me
 33
as my own.
 34
so i loved the girl instead,
 35
who in my life was born underneath
 36
the beautiful tree, in that moment
 37
she was born,
 38
prior to it she
 39
did not exist.
 40

12 Apr 07

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tongue is a perfect word
for line 33

i like your poem i like also
thebreaks which are ballsy because they
are un
expecte
d

and this isnt really a poem at all but what after all is a tongue?
 — jumpoline

just lines 1 and 2 would be a great poem all by them selves
 — jumpoline

Hi OKcomputer

If people read your insightful poem they would realise that you have to live with eyes wide open to the intensity of each moment. Your poem encapsulates the vivid intensity of each moment in time many of which slip by as we muse and meditate on what we have previously seen. Absolutely rock cool and deeply philisophical.

Larry one moment in time Lark  
 — larrylark

I like your line of reasoning.
 — banditfemme

wonderful :)
 — FrayedSkirt

love the story and the complimentary imagery, confusions and observations in this.
 — Mongrol

I really enjoy this piece; the rhythm, line breaks are genius. It has a high impact (very emotional). Nicely done. =)
 — missjayne08

You have caught this moment exquisitly and the poem carries a deeper meaning each time I read it.
 — PaulS

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