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a day at the lake
unknown

my uncle
 1
and his firefighter friends
 2
anchored their boats
 3
in a semi-circle.
 4
 
 
my cousins and i
 5
and the other teenage boys
 6
openly drank beer from the coolers
 7
and watched a clutch of girls
 8
sunning themselves
 9
on shore.
 10
 
 
a big one with bug eyes
 11
swam out to us,
 12
my friend
 13
thinks your cute,
 14
she said to me.
 15
 
 
a brunette
 16
in a yellow two-piece
 17
waved to me
 18
from shore.
 19
 
 
we grabbed more beer
 20
and swam in.
 21
 
 
dana's family
 22
lived in an rv
 23
at the campground.
 24
 
 
she said i had eyes
 25
like the people
 26
on soap operas.
 27
 
 
she took my hand,
 28
we swam out
 29
behind one of the boats.
 30
 
 
the water
 31
was waist deep.
 32
 
 
she slid her bikini off,
 33
then my trunks.
 34
 
 
she put her hands
 35
above her head
 36
palms down
 37
on the outboard motor.
 38
 
 
i ran my fingers
 39
over her back
 40
being careful
 41
to avoid
 42
the cigarette
 43
burns.
 44
 
 
some of them
 45
were fresh.
 46
 
 
she turned around,
 47
fear in her eyes.
 48
does that make me ugly?
 49
 
 
the opposite,
 50
i said.
 51
 
 
we built a bonfire
 52
on shore
 53
and shared a simple peace
 54
until the night
 55
turned our page.
 56

15 Apr 07


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