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afternoon
hank

when i am sitting
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and the sun is blocked
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by the gentle sway of a shadow
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that lay across me like a thin sliver blanket
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and i want that shadow to move
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but i do not
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because i know
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that things are still but always moving
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slow and shifting
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clockwork
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that that sun will work its way around
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that branch to warm me soon
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and then
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and then i think of something else
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a thought that makes things so simple it is silly
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like this  
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the sun (a miracle perhaps?)
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the sun and the moon
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they are the same size in our sky!
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15 Apr 07

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very very nice nice poem poem
 — varun

thanks varun. i wish it lived up to the moment. but at least it's a reminder.
 — hank

it's my most favourite reminder of subjectivity.
thanks for writing, hank. i wish you'd publish your stuff so i could buy a book.
 — varun

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