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Hurry, Hurrah for Our Pâté
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Once opened,
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keep refrigerated
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and use within
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48 hours
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or 24, to be
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extra virgin safe
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You could even shunt
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it all down now on six
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slices of toast
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but remember
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each purchase comes with
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free 'no nonsense' entry
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into the 'Once Opened
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Use Within a Month Lottery'
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for a disease with a very
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long bowel movement.
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Have nice day
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with our pâté.
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Ring us freefone
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if you've stuff to say.
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But if you've sore guts
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you must be nuts
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to think our lawyers
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haven't covered our butts.
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23 Apr 07

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I LOVE "extra virgin safe" in line 6! Brilliant! I'm a big fan of using simple words to describe complex ideas, and those words flow together very nicely! Altogether, I like your poem, but towards the end your ideas become a little clouded and confusing I think. Even so, this is a very good poem!
 — Burrito

Oh man, what a brilliant poem which says so much about our urge to passively consume

Larry make my day Lark
 — larrylark

Ta for commenting folks. Glad you enjoyed. unk :)
 — unknown

Long bowel movement!!
 — wendz

Yes indeed!!
 — unknown

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