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Most Important to Pass On
netskyIam

in draft stage---not yet ready for critique. thanks.

I recall the first mechanic that I ever knew, the most important one
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I ever met, when I was eighteen and a sailor based at Charleston.
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The Navy base had for amenity, an auto hobby shop.  
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An old civilian man worked there on good days part time.
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My first car was a derelict Mercedes Benz.
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I was taking all of it apart,  but got stuck at the first lug nut.
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I had a handy-dandy hand-held impact wrench--
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hit its head with a hammer and
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rounded off the last of the hex flats.
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Fred was passing seventy back in 1973.  
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He looked like silent movie actor Buster Keaton,
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although Fred was never funny.
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Fred had swollen feet and rheumy eyes that spoke as much,
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as he spoke little--quiet man dealing with heart failure,
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dropsy, it was one-time called.  
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Fred presided at the auto hobby shop, where mostly,  he pointed.
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Back to rounding off lug nuts:
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"Fred, help?"
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Fred came to my bay where he assessed the situation in five seconds.
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He produced chisel out from overalls
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and he took up a hammer
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and he demonstrated to the youth
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how real mechanics work.
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Of course it was just
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a confident strike of cold chisel
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held obliquely to the nut.
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One more blow, and it was done.  
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Fred said not a word, he only looked at me
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and winked as I responded
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in amazement with my thanks.
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"Fred! That's great!
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When did you learn to do that?"
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"1920", and that is all, and that is all.
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23 Apr 07


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